You’ve been having pain in your back in the morning, so you decide to go to the doctors. They inform you that it is chronic leukemia. They support you through this hard time by telling you to fight. They tell you that this “life with chronic disease is a marathon, not a sprint, with bumps on the road and frequent detours.” (Khullar 2014) Metaphors are used in sickness and health. Whether it is to get someone through a difficult time or to allow someone to experience a deeper meaning in something. We don’t realize it, but we use metaphors in our everyday lives. You might not see it or hear it, but we encounter them at the doctor’s office, in school, at work, etc. Metaphors have an importance on our physical and mental wellbeing. It impacts our understandings and our beliefs of our bodies, our experiences, and our health. When you are reading an article, you tend to see pasts things in your first time reading, like driving to a new destination and not knowing your way around. Then your second reading, potentially allows you to see things that were missed the first time. Just like paying attention to the houses and trees the second drive, to now knowing the destination. Metaphors are there every day to help us understand a meaning of something that we might not of known or fully understood before. Metaphors can be interpreted in many ways by different people. It is our job to determine what metaphors mean to us.
Imagine a world where there was no such thing as figurative language. Do you think anything would change? Do you think there would be a new way in which we learn or look at things? I believe that there would be a change, and life as we know it would be bland and uneventful. This is because metaphors are used as another way of looking at things to understand things that you might not of before. Figurative language is a way of speaking that could potentially allow you to open your mind to something bigger and better. Living in a world where literal language was the only thing known would stomp on the only area to really reach out and have a different perspective on things.
Your choice to include an example in the beginning was a super nice touch. It was a great way to establish what you will be addressing in your essay, as well as directly connecting it back to one of the articles. One thing that you may want to do in order to make your introduction stronger would be exploring organization a bit more. There are some points at the end that seem to jump around. However, this is a great start to an introduction!
Awesome two paragraphs…I believe you could work on simplifying your first intro where it is too specific and already jumps quickly into a quote. Personally I feel like the 2nd paragraph is a better overall idea and could work into a great paper.
I really like your second paragraph. The rhetorical questions in the beginning are a great way to get the reader’s mind to start thinking. I would try to elaborate on it too just so there is context behind the argument.
Expand on figurative speech and the potential it has. What can it do for the public? How does it influence the mental mind or health? I would try to elaborate and further develop it to show your side of the argument .